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Saturday 8 July 2017

Winter Learning Journey

For this activity in the winter learning journey, I have to pretend that I got lost in a forest all by myself. I have to write a short story (8-10 sentences) about what might happen next.

It was a wonderful day, with the sun shining and the birds chirping. I strolled along the forest floor, dazed by the forest’s natural beauty. Suddenly, I realized the I couldn’t hear my companions footsteps, talk or endless laughter. I was lost! I wandered around for ages, shouting at the top of my lungs, hoping that they might hear me. My only water bottle lay in my bag, dry as a bone. Soon, the heat began to kick in. My lips were cracked and dry and my throat was sore. After a while, I just gave up on looking for my friends and lay down. Soon, sleep came. In the morning, I didn’t really feel like walking, so I just sat on the forest floor. After a couple of hours, I heard a peculiar noise. It was a helicopter. As quick as I could, I climbed the tallest tree around me and when I saw the helicopter I waved my arms frantically. Someone in the helicopter let down a piece of rope and I grabbed it and climbed up inside.

9 comments:

  1. Hi Daniel, This story was very deep and it included a lot of figures of speech which was good to see. Some of your sentences though did not make any sense so please double check your work before you publish it.

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  2. Hi Daniel,
    Your short story was very interesting and I liked how you added different types of punctuation. Although, some of your sentences didn't make sense so could you please go over your work again?
    - Zahra

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  3. Hi Daniel I like you story you wrote. It has some powerful words like dazed and chirping. I like the ending of the story when the helicopter came. Some of your sentences don't make sense so please can you double check. Keep up the great work!

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  4. Hi Daniel,
    Your 8 to 10 story was interesting and amazing. I liked the part that said It was a wonderful day, with the sun shining and the birds chirping.
    Awesome work.

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  5. Hi Daniel
    Your doing very well with you blog post and your blurb

    keep it up.

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  6. Hello Daniel, I really like how you have been using some powerful words and similes in your story. They hooked me into reading your whole story. Amazing job and keep it up.

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  7. Hi Daniel. I really like your story. You have described the setting very well. I really like your synonym for friends (companions). I really like how you have used punctuation marks like, commas and exclamation marks to make your story sound a lot better. Keep up the great work.

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  8. Daniel,

    This is a really well written, creative story! I like how you used a simile to describe your thirst - "dry as a bone". Well done on writing an awesomely imaginative piece of writing!

    Nicky :)

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  9. Hi Daniel,
    I really your story it is really great. I like that you used language features. Well Done!
    Eric

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