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Showing posts with label Narrative. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Narrative. Show all posts

Friday, 21 October 2016

Owl Narrative

This is my narrative that I wrote. I had to write a story about a baby owl who is taking his/her first flight.

Leap Of Faith

This is it. My big day, Ralph thought to himself as the wind howled outside like a owl in pain. Ralph is a Barn Owl who just turned nine weeks old. Today was a test to see if he could fly. He really wanted to make his mother proud (His dad died in a storm). Ralph lived in a tree, with the rest of his parliament (A group of owls), though he had his own hole with his mother. The parliament are all Barn owls. The more important owls lived up near the top of the tree while the less important owls were further down. Normally, on a windy day like this he would be in one of his friends homes playing a fun game called I Spy with them.
“Ralph, come and have your breakfast!” his mother called.
“Coming” was the reply, which was muffled because he was lying face down in his nest which was made out of bits of grass and leaves.
Ralph didn’t eat much because he thought he might puke with nervousness. Suddenly, a loud hoot was heard from near the top of the tree. All of the owls who were nine to ten weeks old were being called up for their test.

“You will fly from this tree all the way to that apple tree across from here” said one of the older owls. He was in charge because he was really wise and fair. Ralph fixed his eyes on his target and took a deep breath.
“When I call, fly for the tree” the elder spoke again.
“GO!”
All of the birds took off and launched themselves from the branch that they clung tightly on. Ralph started flapping his wings but he was forgetting one important thing: He wasn’t supposed to flap just up and down, he had to move his wings forward too . By the time he realized his mistake, it was too late. At that moment, Ralph started panicking as the ground rushed up to meet him…

“Are you alright?” Ralph could hear his mother's familiar voice as he opened his eyes.
“Yeah, i’m fine” he replied.
He got out of his bed and walked out of his house.
“Where are you going?” his mother asked from somewhere behind him.
“I got to try again mum, or I’ll never get to fly”
“Be careful” was the worried reply.

On the way to the top of the tree, Ralph found some other owls his age, they were bullies and had a big ego. They thought they were cool and always got what they wanted, like more food, for they created far too much trouble if they didn’t it.
“Here is the failure!” one of them called, as the others sniggered.
“Everyone else made it apart from you!” another one exclaimed.
“I’m going to go and try again” replied Ralph.
“What, so you can fail again?” that was the first one again.
Ralph then decided to ignore them as he marched to his destination.

When he got back to the top area of the tree he found the elder owl of the parliament.
“I knew you would try again” the elder said.
“How did you know?” Ralph asked, puzzled.  
“Your father failed on his first flight as well, but he came back and tried”
“Did he succeed?”
“Yes, just remember, you must concentrate and focus”
“Yeah, I got it”
Ralph looked down at the grassy ground way below him, and the at the tree with delicious red apples. He put out one foot, to test how strong the air was. Once he was prepared, he leaped and glided through the air. He flapped his wings in the way he was supposed to, in fact, he did everything correct so soon he found himself soaring through the air chuckling in delight. It was a wonderful feeling, to be flying, with the air going past his face. Once he landed on his target, the apple tree, he flew back to his home, where his mum watched him land. She had a big smile on her face.

“Well done” she said happily.

Wednesday, 13 April 2016

The Modern Little Red Riding

This term we have been learning to write narratives. We used the picture prompt below to help us imagine how this situation came about. We tried to hook our audience in by thinking about the pace of events and the pictures we painted with words. This time I used punctuation like semi-colons (;) and ellipses (...) and next time I will try to use other punctuation like colons (:).




The grass rustled and parted as footsteps shoved their way through. The girl ran through the plains, the dead grass was slowing her down as she desperately ran away from the dark and mysterious shape that was following her. Her red cloak flew behind her as she ran for her life. The girl’s name is Jess, but she was called Little Red Riding Hood by her friends and family, even though she was fifteen now. She looked behind her as she ran and saw that the dark shape was still following her. Suddenly she tripped over a rock that was hidden in the grass. The dark shape was still gaining when she managed to recover and stand up.
“Help, Help!” She shouted.

Jess couldn’t run because when she fell, her ankle felt like it was broken. Every step brought a new batch of pain into her leg. Then, when she looked up she saw that the dark shape had caught up to her. Jess soon realized that the dark shape was a man, he was wearing a black coloured cloak. The man had no expression on his face, it was like he was a robot. The guy picked up a rock and hit her head with it. The last thing she saw was the sun setting and then her world turned black...

“AAAAHHHH!”, Jess screamed. She had just woken up and saw a humongous red back spider in front of her face. She scrambled up to her feet and backed away to a wall. The she realized there was a scorpion sitting on the pillow her head had just been on. After a while, she got over her fear and looked around. The room that she was in was like a prison (Actually it looked like torture room), there were no windows and only one door. The door was made out of metal and Jess knew instantly that whoever kidnapped her had locked the door. Who wouldn’t?

Soon the man that had chased her came back and took her up several flights of stairs. A man in a scientist coat was sitting at a computer, typing away. When he heard the footsteps echoing across the steel floor, he turned around. “Welcome, my name is Doctor Frankenstein”, he said.
“The real Frankenstein?” Jess asked uncertainly. She didn’t really believe that this weird man was Dr Frankenstein.
“No, I just think he is a genius, he’s sort of like my role model!” He said with a cackling laugh. He must be crazy, Jess thought. Several men were tied up at the floor next to ‘Doctor Frankenstein’. They were unconscious but Jess could see that they had police uniforms.
“Why are you holding us captive?”, Jess questioned.
“I’m holding these men because they thought it was a good idea to investigate the experiments I have been doing in here.”
“What about me? Why are you keeping me here?”
“You got in the way, now enough chatter, chuck her in the pit!”

Jess wondered what was the ‘pit’, but she soon found out. The man that had kidnapped her took her there. Jess thought it would be just a medium sized hole where they keep her; she was wrong. It was a massive hole in the ground and at the bottom was snakes. There were so many different kinds of snakes (From King cobra’s to Rattlesnakes and Black mamba’s).
“HELP!” Jess screamed. She didn’t want to get want to get any of those poisonous fangs in her. She kicked and struggled but the man that was holding her wouldn't budge. His grip was so strong she couldn’t break free, but she managed to kick his bony ankle. Dr Frankenstein's henchman stumbled and fell into the pit. He got up almost immediately and started to throw the snakes off that were on him. Eventually though, he lost the struggle for survival. The poison from one of the snakes made the henchman fall to the dusty ground silently.

Jess scrambled backwards so she couldn’t see the body, then she realized that the men she saw before were in danger. She walked into a room and saw her mobile phone (It was a present from her mother). When she turned it on there was no connection but when she smacked it on her palm there was a weak connection. She quickly dialled 111 and explained where she was and what happened. Then she hid in the room she woke up in. Soon she heard sirens and screams. When the screaming finished, Jess got up and walked out. The police came out and escorted her out the castle that Doctor Frankenstein used as his base. A few days later she was back at her house lying down on her couch. She was holding a newspaper that was a couple of days old. The headlines were Crazy Scientist Arrested. Jess decided that from now on, she would stay home and relax.