Sunday, 18 December 2016

Summer Learning Journey

For this task I have to write a short story. I can use one of these three story starters:
1. I looked around the room. Nothing seemed unusual, but then...
2. I knew it was going to be a unusual day when my mum came into my bedroom and said...
3. The spaceship was out of control and only one person could save us...
I chose to use the first story starter.

 I looked around the room. Nothing seemed unusual, but then I heard a loud boom that echoed across the hallway. I was in the corridor at school and out the window I could see the science building on fire and students were fleeing from the building. I ran towards the unfortunate building and gazed at the flames in wonder. They were turning different colors, from red to orange to yellow to blue and so on.
"What happened?" I asked one of the retreating students.
"Someones experiment went wrong" He replied.
After the flames got put out, the science lab was closed for the rest of the week. When we were allowed to enter the lab, the building looked like it had been freshly painted. The chemicals from the explosion cause the walls and floor to turn different colors!


  1. Hello Daniel, you have written an incredible story. I liked how you have used powerful words to make you story better. Keep on working hard.

  2. Hey Daniel,
    Great story about a experiment gone wrong ( The Experiment part is amazing!). I agree with AJ that you have made your story more better by using powerful words. Great work Dan!

  3. Hey Daniel
    What are very suburb short story. I like how you have storng and good words in your story. Keep on doing the great job.

  4. Hello, Daniel I really like your story. My favourite part is when everyone sees the different colours on the floor and walls. I like how you have used speech mark to show the dialogue. Keep up the great work.

  5. Hi Daniel,

    What a great short story to round out your first week of your Learning Journey. Well done!

    I really enjoyed reading it, in particular I thought the language you used to describe what was happening was excellent. Your story had me wondering what kind of experiment they might have been doing to have that kind of reaction! With all those different colours, they could have been playing with all sorts of chemicals. Do you have a science building at Panmure Bridge? I hope no accidents like this one ever happen there!

    Awesome creative writing Daniel, I'm really looking forward to reading the second week of your learning journey.